Lesson 8 Exercise Title: Business Writing Skills
Subtitle: Lesson 8 Exercise
Presented by: Fatima
Contact Information: blackboarder1@gmail.com

Polishing Your Business Writing

Polishing your business writing involves:

Editing:
Reviewing and revising for clarity and coherence.

Proofreading:
Checking for grammar, punctuation, and spelling errors.

Feedback:
Seeking feedback from peers or mentors.

Formatting:
Using consistent formatting and style guidelines.


Original Email:

Subject: Meeting Update

Dear Team,
I just wanted to touch base about our upcoming meeting. It’s been scheduled for next Tuesday at 10 AM in the conference room. We will discuss the new marketing strategy and go over the sales figures from the last quarter. Also, I need everyone to bring their project updates.

Let me know if you have any questions.

Best,
John

Edited Email:

Subject: Reminder: Team Meeting Next Tuesday at 10 AM

Dear Team,
I hope this email finds you well. I wanted to remind you about our upcoming team meeting scheduled for next Tuesday at 10 AM in the conference room.

The agenda includes:
• Discussing the new marketing strategy.
• Reviewing the sales figures from the last quarter.
• Sharing project updates from each team member.

Please make sure to bring your project updates to the meeting. If you have any questions or need further information, feel free to reach out.

Thank you, and I look forward to our productive discussion.

Best regards,
John

Editing and Proofreading Points:

Subject Line:
Made it more specific and informative.

Original:
Meeting Update

Edited:
Reminder: Team Meeting Next Tuesday at 10 AM

Opening:
Added a polite greeting and ensured the purpose of the email was clear.

Original:
I just wanted to touch base about our upcoming meeting.

Edited:
I hope this email finds you well. I wanted to remind you about our upcoming team meeting scheduled for next Tuesday at 10 AM in the conference room.

Agenda Clarity:
Listed the meeting agenda in bullet points for better readability.

Original:
We will discuss the new marketing strategy and go over the sales figures from the last quarter. Also, I need everyone to bring their project updates.

Edited:
The agenda includes:
• Discussing the new marketing strategy.
• Reviewing the sales figures from the last quarter.
• Sharing project updates from each team member.

Call to Action:
Clearly requested team members to bring project updates.

Original:
Also, I need everyone to bring their project updates.

Edited:
Please make sure to bring your project updates to the meeting.

Tone and Closing:
Added a polite closing and expressed anticipation for the meeting.

Original:
Let me know if you have any questions.

Edited:
If you have any questions or need further information, feel free to reach out. Thank you, and I look forward to our productive discussion.